Comments on: A poem of love and longing by Parveen Shakir http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/ In search of the unsearchable: O, my soul! where would you find your house? Sat, 05 Jul 2008 17:56:44 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5.1 By: alex http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4651 alex Sat, 10 May 2008 22:25:19 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4651 Whats the procedure to register on this site, and contribute our posts/articles?? Whats the procedure to register on this site, and contribute our posts/articles??

]]> By: Asmapk http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4648 Asmapk Sat, 10 May 2008 02:46:48 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4648 thanks for sharing this beautiful piece with us Raza. thanks for sharing this beautiful piece with us Raza.

]]> By: Junaid http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4511 Junaid Tue, 15 Apr 2008 18:50:20 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4511 its hard to get over...kisi aur asman, kisi aur sarzameen ... what would be this world without poetry...its intoxicating really its hard to get over…kisi aur asman, kisi aur sarzameen … what would be this world without poetry…its intoxicating really

]]> By: RR http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4506 RR Tue, 15 Apr 2008 12:14:27 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4506 Siddhu ji: thanks Id: thanks for dropping by - we have to start with your Urdu lessons ASAP...:) Shirazi Bhai: Wish we knew the answers to your metaphysical question..well, we can always search for such a sky and such a zameen... Dear Anais: Many thanks -your translation is brilliant - I will post it separately again..maybe on the Pak Tea House blog as well - www.pakteahouse.wordpress.com please render more translations if you can for the blog -we need to introduce the world to the pleasures of Urdu poetry. thanks again Siddhu ji: thanks

Id: thanks for dropping by - we have to start with your Urdu lessons ASAP…:)

Shirazi Bhai: Wish we knew the answers to your metaphysical question..well, we can always search for such a sky and such a zameen…

Dear Anais: Many thanks -your translation is brilliant - I will post it separately again..maybe on the Pak Tea House blog as well - http://www.pakteahouse.wordpress.com

please render more translations if you can for the blog -we need to introduce the world to the pleasures of Urdu poetry. thanks again

]]> By: Anais http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4505 Anais Tue, 15 Apr 2008 09:08:58 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4505 How lovely... thank you for this. I wanted to stay with it, felt an urge to tweak... taking liberties and with no idea of accuracy. Therefore, a version in full realisation of its impossibility: a melting twilight the world in its entirety dissolves the scent of you... the blossoming pullulation of dreams all dissolves ... a vision deferred in a while a star will emerge on the horizon to gaze at you replete with meaning ... your heart shall then reminisce, there shall be an echo of a memory... the tale of a separation, of an unfinished moment... of dreams unborn, thoughts unsaid we ought to have met in another time in pursuit of attainable dreams below a different sky upon a different earth we ought to have met then, there... Anais How lovely… thank you for this. I wanted to stay with it, felt an urge to tweak… taking liberties and with no idea of accuracy. Therefore, a version in full realisation of its impossibility:

a melting twilight
the world in its entirety dissolves

the scent of you…
the blossoming
pullulation of dreams

all dissolves

… a vision deferred

in a while
a star will emerge on the horizon
to gaze at you
replete with meaning
… your heart shall then reminisce,
there shall be an echo of a memory…
the tale of a separation,
of an unfinished moment…
of dreams unborn, thoughts unsaid

we ought to have met
in another time
in pursuit of attainable dreams
below a different sky
upon a different earth
we ought to have met then, there…

Anais

]]> By: Shirazi http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4500 Shirazi Tue, 15 Apr 2008 07:41:11 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4500 Ya, but where is that different earth, that different sky. Tell me please... Ya, but where is that different earth, that different sky. Tell me please…

]]> By: IMeMy http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4497 IMeMy Mon, 14 Apr 2008 21:31:49 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4497 What moving sentiments! The translation of the last three lines is so evocative; wonder what the original does! What moving sentiments! The translation of the last three lines is so evocative; wonder what the original does!

]]> By: Sidhusaaheb http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4495 Sidhusaaheb Mon, 14 Apr 2008 19:42:36 +0000 http://www.razarumi.com/2008/04/14/a-poem-of-love-and-longing-by-parveen-shakir/#comment-4495 Waah! Waah!

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